i wrote a song, but it's terribly depressing/sick, and i really don't know how i feel about it. i mean, the words don't sound cheesy, and they get the point across, which is a victory for me. the problem is that it's a 'lullaby' about a girl who has a kid out of wedlock and discards of it by throwing it in the trash, and i'm really not happy about that. i mean, the one song that is sound, and it's about this; just my luck. lol
i've been reading the lyrics to 'thru the eyes of ruby' by the smashing pumpkins. it really is a marvelous song.
"breathing underwater and living under glass"
that's got to be my favorite line from the song, which is about young love and how you shouldn't rush into things like marriage because you'll get there and realize you're miserable.
i'm still working on stuff, but it's an upward battle for me, and the opposition has archers.
i am completely terrible at song writing so I'm not one to give advice lol.. but i realized lately while listening to U2 songs.. or honestly any classic rock songs for that matter.. that a lot of the songs are just comprised of images.. which i really love. I feel like popular music today tells some kind of a story.. the lyrics are like a narrative. but when i love about some of the older rock music is that its like a compilation of various images that can take on whatever meaning you want them to.
ReplyDeleteso maybe try that in your song writing. avoid the narrative and try to just work with various images...
you know, i had noticed that, but when i try to do that, i try to link the images somehow, and then i get caught up in, 'but the proper word won't fit here, what's the best word to fit here?' at least i got over rhyme schemes lol
ReplyDelete'thru the eyes of ruby' is very much comprised of images, but they somehow link together. i think what i need is a subject from which to create images. like, if i had a topic to write a song about, i could try to make analogies about it without actually saying what it is, and let people figure it out. i think that might work; i just need something to write about lol
don't try so hard
ReplyDeletethat's easy for you to say amanda, for you are poetically inclined, whereas i am poetically retarded.
ReplyDeleteyou're not poetically retarded. poetry shouldn't be analyzed while it's being written. start with haikus or something...because a haiku is retarded anyway.
ReplyDeleteMy roommate is tall
But her brain is really small
Hippopotamus
i can write haiku
ReplyDeletethey're not really hard to do
they just make no sense